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Writing Review Thread - Style/Grammar Nazis Welcome

Discussion in 'Business, Careers & Education' started by HomerJ, Mar 21, 2011.

  1. HomerJ

    HomerJ Senior member

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    In the present thread, post, if you wrote something, for a report or CV, perhaps your clothing blog and you're not sure whether it's good writing or even understandable, your question here, and someone will offer suggestions, which are helpful, and perhaps your old writing and new writing could then be characterized as clunky and elegant, respectively; clear as mud?

    My question to start.

    I've written: "greater [effect] using [Method A] than [Method B]."

    I feel an urge to put another "using" or a "with" between the last two.
     


  2. rennavate

    rennavate Senior member

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    It's not necessary to include another "use."

    "...greater effect using Method A than Method B..." is correct.
     


  3. Huntsman

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    1) I endorse this thread.

    2) We really need the rest of the sentence, for, as you know, good writing is not merely a matter of grammar. Though the second "using" is not strictly necessary, I'd probably use it for the clarity and force that parallelism brings. I might restructure the whole sentence as well, depending on the rest of it.

    ~ H
     


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    mm84321 Senior member

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    Splendid idea for a thread, HomerJ.
     


  5. Eason

    Eason Bicurious Racist

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    In the present thread, post, if you wrote something, for a report or CV, perhaps your clothing blog and you're not sure whether it's good writing or even understandable, your question here, and someone will offer suggestions, which are helpful, and perhaps your old writing and new writing could then be characterized as clunky and elegant, respectively; clear as mud?

    My question to start.

    I've written: "greater [effect] using [Method A] than [Method B]."

    I feel an urge to put another "using" or a "with" between the last two.


    What's the focus of the sentence? If the method is, then I might say "Method A results in a greater effect than Method B." for example.
     


  6. HomerJ

    HomerJ Senior member

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    Bumping with an article on how to write a scientific paper. Hope this is helpful.
     


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    In the present thread, post, if you wrote something, for a report or CV, perhaps your clothing blog and you're not sure whether it's good writing or even understandable, your question here, and someone will offer suggestions, which are helpful, and perhaps your old writing and new writing could then be characterized as clunky and elegant, respectively; clear as mud?


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