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Haiku Battle

Discussion in 'General Chat' started by Augusto86, Apr 15, 2007.

  1. Augusto86

    Augusto86 Sean Penn's Mexican love child

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    Ok, so many of you have noticed, shouted at me, and mocked my haiku-writing for the past couple of days. Sometimes you just get bored...it's been the slowest weekend ever!

    Anyways: I still love haikus and instead of cluttering up perfectly reasonable threads I've decided to start a haiku battle. Basically the way it works is: I'll start off with a haiku. The next person up will take some element of that haiku and turn it back around on me - imagery, subject, meter, whatever. Try to make it a sort of riposte. It's actually a sort of old Japanese form/game.

    It's a fun little game. And it'll shut me up! [​IMG]


    The pen weeps black ink;
    and parchment stained with its tears
    crumples in her hands.
     


  2. JetBlast

    JetBlast Senior member

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    Yes, I am aware.
    My haiku is very bad.
    I am miserable.

    [​IMG]

    JB
     


  3. Brian SD

    Brian SD Moderator

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    The haiku master
    Weeps for faded Nudie Bjorns
    Olas will not join
     


  4. amerikajinda

    amerikajinda Senior member

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    告白は
    するより聞くのが
    苦手です
     


  5. Augusto86

    Augusto86 Sean Penn's Mexican love child

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    告白は
    するより聞くのが
    苦手です


    Foe boasts of his strength;
    yet in foreign tongue, his pride
    falls upon deaf ears.
     


  6. VMan

    VMan Senior member

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    Foe boasts of his strength;
    yet in foreign tongue, his pride
    falls upon deaf ears.


    You: Big fish, small pond
    Wanna step with true ballers?
    You gonna get served.
     


  7. yerfdog

    yerfdog Senior member

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    The king to be crowned
    Punks jump up to get beat down
    Always defeat clowns

    [​IMG]
     


  8. Huntsman

    Huntsman Senior member

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    The pen weeps black ink;
    and parchment stained with its tears
    crumples in her hands.


    Regardless of the pro/con haiku battle, you must know that I really appreciate this one. I write alot, by hand, with a dip pen, and it is a very important process to me -- weeping tears is an apt analogy. I have written it out, and have put it under the glass that protects my desktop.

    Thanks,
    Huntsman
     


  9. Alter

    Alter Senior member

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    Regardless of the pro/con haiku battle, you must know that I really appreciate this one. I write alot, by hand, with a dip pen, and it is a very important process to me -- weeping tears is an apt analogy. I have written it out, and have put it under the glass that protects my desktop.

    Thanks,
    Huntsman


    I agree. Augusto has written a few nice haikus in the last few weeks. I hope he is saving these. They will make a nice collection someday.
     


  10. designprofessor

    designprofessor Senior member

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    a mere golf pencil
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    than my whole hard drive
     


  11. chorse123

    chorse123 Senior member

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    endless New York rain
    spring clothes in closet unworn
    fucking Nor'easter
     


  12. JetBlast

    JetBlast Senior member

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    Chorse, you win I think [​IMG]


    Angry passengers,
    A whole lot of fricking rain,
    This is the airport.

    JB
     


  13. mack11211

    mack11211 Senior member

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    endless New York rain
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    Like he said.

    [add lines and syllables as necessary]
     


  14. amerikajinda

    amerikajinda Senior member

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    rain, rain go away
    come back another day, please.
    plagiarism rules.
     


  15. LSeca

    LSeca Senior member

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    rain rain go away
    come back another day please
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    winner! [​IMG]

    edit: sorry to quote before the commas
     


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