The other tie is too close in colour to the jacket for my liking.
I think you could improve your fits the most by changing the PS, which I dislike in all of the fits, the pale blue being the worst.
cheers - I have some wool challis squares in blue and green coming that'll lift my game- I hope. single color squares, no matter the texture, are not so good for bridging shirt-tie n jacket
Half windsor with a knit tie? Somebody kill this man!
Now seriously, I think it works well. I know that feeling, most RTW ties are made for giants, at least if you're going to tie a four-in-hand.