Originally Posted by KPO89
Here is my summary:
Too cheesy? Too much? Critique me please.
Trying to be constructive here. I have worked in marketing for a long time and my suggestion would be to put paragraph 3 first and start with "I create need". Otherwise you are hoping the reader makes it through two paragraphs before getting to your value statement - which is a good one. So put your hard hitting value statement first and then back it up (work or projects that you have done, skills, etc).
I have been contacted by many recruiters and had many interview offers based on just my LinkedIn profile. Based on that experience, I think recommendations are OK, but your network is more important. Hiring managers are more likely to want to talk to someone they know, someone who knows someone they know (so they can get the reference from someone they trust anyway), or someone that obviously moves in similar industry circles. If you have no experience or little experience, really try and increase your network. Don't know anybody of value? Search for people that went graduated from your school in recent years that have a job in the area you are interested in. Hopefully they are mangers by now. Send them a short email through LinkedIn and tell them you are interested in that industry/area and you are looking for job opportunites and advice. If they are out of school less than 5 years they will probably be sympathetic and reply (80% chance). In a follow-up email (if they are in your area) ask them for an "informational interview". You don't expect them to hire you, you are just looking for information. They will probably decline - but you can thank them for the contact and ask them if you can link to them (you are doing all this via LinkedIn remember?). You will have Mr. Senior Manager in your network and all of their contacts will then be 2nd tier. You can gently exploit this network and build on it. LinkedIn connections are gold.
OK, now I am way off topic on how to conduct a job search, but note to job seekers with no experience. Managers see a million resumes and you need to stand out somehow. You have to be memorable, however modestly. If you don't have any experience, make
some! Be an intern, a volunteer, do some kind of project, maybe with a group of friends. If you are looking for a job where the web matters you have no excuse for not somehow creating/publishing some kind of project that shows your skills and makes you "you know, that guy that correlated public transportation power outages to increased media downloads - I saw him on LinkedIn and sent you his resume".
Sorry if I derailed your thread, but I have a lot of sympathy for today's job seekers. LinkedIn can be a very powerful tool but you
are the most effective weapon.