You can tighten a lot of things.
Thing about resumes is that the cliches do matter: keep it short, make it readable, people will read it quickly, mostly scanning.
I recommend this book Gallery of Best Resumes libraries usually have them so check it out and just make copies of resumes you like. It showcases resumes categorized under specific career fields. Browse through the whole book to steal ideas and buzzwords. It really does help.